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Wednesday, March 14, 2018

Show not tell, setting writing

This week we are working on using descriptive language by sharing our writing straight onto our blog.  The challenge we have is to describe a place using only six sentences.  After reading the description you need to guess the place that has been described. It would really help if you say what clues helped you come to this conclusion. Here is the one that Mr. Riceman shared with us to start.

1.   A blanket of white surrounds me in every direction I look.
2.   Mist escapes from my mouth with every breath I exhale.
3.   Small patches of exposed rock stand out like islands in the sea.
4.   Bright sun rays stream down, pounding onto the tall white cliffs.
5.  Crack, a block of ice tumbles down a cliff and into the sea.
6.  Strong gusts of wind whip frozen icy particles into the air that whip at my face.

Leave a comment below thinking where you think I could be and what clues you have for this.

40 comments:

  1. I think this is some snowy mountain of some sort

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  2. I think this is mt ruapehu because it's snowy like the white blankets and the black rocks are on the mountain.

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  3. Hello,
    I think it could me a snowy cliff or snowy mountain in Antarctica after hearing the sentence in sentence six.

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  4. The white blankets and the rocks in the sea give it away

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  5. I think this is Antarctica because you said clues that make people feel cold.

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  6. i think your in the north pole

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  7. I think this place is Antartica because the crackling of the ice and it seems to be that you are cold since there is mist escaping from your mouth.

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  9. I think is Antarctica because it says Crack, a block of ice tumbles down a cliff and into the sea. Strong gusts of wind whip frozen icy particles into the air that whip at my face.

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  10. I think this is Antarctica because the ice falls into the sea and most ice aren't near the sea. Also because Antarctica it is surrounded by sea or water.

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  11. I think this is South Pole/Antarctica

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  12. At first I thought they were at Mount Ruapehu, But then I thought they were at ....... Antarctica ! Sounds a bit silly but it could be.

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  13. I think this is at Mount Ruapehu because the white cliffs, a ice block cracks and wind whips frozen icy particles in the air come to your face

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  14. I think it is Antarctica because it says it's covered in snow and some ice falls into the ocean.

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  15. I think that it is Antarctica because it says the ice tumbles in to the sea because it is surrounded by water

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  16. I think this is in the snow because the sentence that says i am surrounded by a big white blanket and the sentence that says Crack, a block of ice tumbles down a cliff and into the sea

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  17. I think this is Antarctica because it says a block of ice tumble's in to the sea and Antarctica is surrounded by water.

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  18. I think your are in antarctica because it says crack a piece of ice
    tumbles down a cliff into the sea and that how some icebergs are formed

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  19. I think this is mt ruapehu or the arctic because it says a bit of mist disperses from every time you breathe. and because there is cloud all around you And because there are cliffs and ice every where around the artic and moutains

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  20. I think that it is a snowing mountain because of the ice

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  21. I think this is the north pole because the last 2 sentences match with the north pole.

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  22. I think this is North pole because the last 2 sentences match the north pole

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  23. I think this is Antarctica because it says the is a white surrounds me in every direction I look,Mist escapes from my mouth with every breath I exhale, Small patches of exposed rock stand out like islands in the sea,Bright sun rays stream down, pounding onto the tall white cliffs,A block of ice tumbles down a cliff and into the sea and strong gusts of wind whip frozen icy particles into the air that whip at my face.

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  24. I think this it is a snowy place like Antarctica. I think I know this because it says "A block of ice tumbles down a cliff and into the sea"

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  25. I think it is the ocean because it has rocks and sometimes it has freezing water

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  26. the north pole because Strong gusts of wind whip frozen icy particles into the air that whip at my face.

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  27. I think this is...
    Antarctica because it is very cold there and there are icebergs and a block of ice. And there is a sea there but a very very cold sea. And because there are cliffs there, the cliffs might be a bunch of snow cliffs up a little mountain where you have to climb up.

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  28. An icy area near the sea. The sea bit because ice tumbled down into the sea, and an ice are because of pretty much all the other clues.

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  29. I think this is mt rupahu because it says a blanket surrounds you with snow

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  30. I don't think it would be Mt Ruapehu because it mentions the sea, and there is no seas near Mt Ruapehu.

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  31. I think this place is Antarctica because you said when you exhale mist escapes your mouth and you also said theirs frozen parts

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  32. I iltk it is in taeta bcen it is clond.

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  33. I think its hot because of the sun.

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  34. I think it is Antarctica because you wrote cold and frozen things

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  35. i think you done good describing show not tell

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  37. nice great job by doing show not tell you did so good

    by charlirose

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  38. nice work you did a great job doing the show not tell

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  39. Nice job on what your doing its very nice

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