Hi Bloggers,
We have been focusing on persuading people when writing. Persuasive writing is when we share what we think and use examples to convince readers to think like us. We used the traditional tale "Jack and the Beanstalk" as our motivation. First, we read the book. From this, we discussed reasons whether or not Jack should have taken the hen that laid golden eggs. Our thinking is shared below in the padlet.
Next, we decided whether we wanted to argue that Jack should have taken the hen left it with the Giant. We made sure our writing had an introduction and some convincing reasons. Kaiwhare did a great job with this writing. Here are two examples below. Have a read and please let us know what you think with by posting positive, thoughtful and helpful comments.
Najwa's persuasive writing:
I think that Jack should not have taken the golden eggs because it is never good to steal other peoples property.
First Jack climbed higher and higher until he reached the top he quickly took the big brown hen and ran as fast as he ever could. It was not his stuff and it is very wrong to be a thief.
Secondly when Jack climbed up and stole the hen the giant saw him and stomped after him. The giant got hurt because Jack cut down the green magic beanstalk. It is like if you pushed someone got hurt and it is not ok to hurt other people they could feel in real pain.
Lily's persuasive writing:
I think that Jack should have climbed the beanstalk and taken the hen/chicken that lays golden eggs because they could have more special things in their life.
My first reason is they can buy a big clean new house. When they have the new house it won't be dirty moldy or stinky any more. It will have new nice stuff in the nice new house. It will be nothing like the house they had before.
Secondly they can now afford juicy food from the shop. If they have food to eat they will be healthy not hungry. It was really hard for them when they didn't have any food. However they would have food if they had the hen/chicken
Finally they would never be poor again They want be poor if had the hen/chicken. They would have money and they would have friends. However they might go out together with their friends. When they have the money they would get to buy whatever they want And maybe they will be really rich. If they had the hen/chicken...
I have told you three reasons why Jack should have taken the hen/chicken that lays golden shiny eggs.
Kaiwhare, this is brilliant persuasive writing. I like how you used the introduction for the reader to understand what you thought Jack should do. Your reasons are very convincing. All my senses were engaged: I could see the golden shiny eggs in my mind; I was reminded of what a moldy house smells like; I could hear the giant fee-fi-fo-fumming; I know what it feels like to have something stolen from you; and I could taste a juicy watermelon. Thank you for sharing.
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